The minor works you did long before can lead to your success.
- 2018.05.09. 17:19
- 842
첨부(6)
-
1.
2018-05-09 17.31.42.png
File Size: 1.24MB/Download: 0
-
2.
2018-05-09 17.34.17.png
File Size: 1.24MB/Download: 0
-
3.
2018-05-09 17.34.48.png
File Size: 1.26MB/Download: 0
-
4.
2018-05-09 17.41.18.png
File Size: 1.21MB/Download: 0
-
5.
2018-05-09 16.23.41.png
File Size: 1.21MB/Download: 0
-
6.
2018-05-09 16.24.00.png
File Size: 1.32MB/Download: 0
The minor works you did long before - whether you can remember it until now or not - can lead to your victory or future success.Sometimes, we are disappointed by the failure even though we've strained to make a success of something.
But, it is my belief, that our lives are orginally filled with many failures, and which fact will continue in the rest of our lives, But those failures will have an effect in our furture collectively.
Someone's love affair is the same thing.
Unless you are handsome or delectable by nature, the failure of your love is the natural thing.
But trials and tribulations make us strong.
By the failure, we'll learn more and more, and someday we can find ourselves more mature, knowledgeable about love.
Human is the getting better things, not perpect things.
Keep your composure.
Jh
이 댓글을 삭제하시겠습니까?
[참혹한 연잎꿩의다리]님의 댓글을 신고합니다.
2번째줄 sometime -> sometimes
our lives is -> our life is / our lives are
filled with many failure -> filled with many failures
and which fact -> and which in fact
여기까지 읽다가 더 읽기 싫네...공부 더 해와
아니면 글 쓸때마다 조금씩 봐줄게
and your title is about how our everyday life endeavors will help us in later life but in the paragraph what you are actually talking about is 'keep trying you will succeed sometime, somehow'. i do see the strings you are trying to connect but maybe you should try to get more deep into detail, giving more examples on how actually the 'minor works' help later.
also, I revised your conclusion sentence to something more expressive and grammatically right.
"Humans are developing beings who learn and make progress from their mistakes; they are not born perfect"
like as you said, people are not perfect from the start; it takes many mistakes and failures to take it to the next level. keep it up
이 댓글을 삭제하시겠습니까?
[빠른 목화]님의 댓글을 신고합니다.
이 댓글을 삭제하시겠습니까?
[무심한 하늘타리]님의 댓글을 신고합니다.
이 게시물을 삭제하시겠습니까?